Something I have a hard time with when I write is that I always just want to get straight to the action. I’ve countered this bad habit a bit by doing character sketches before I start writing, but it’s still an issue. Does anyone else have this problem? Any suggestions on how to incorporate more character development without making it seem insignificant?
Yea, so I’m close to being finished editing my short story. I’ve fixed all the grammar and punctuation errors I made in the first draft; which by the way I didn’t realize I had so many. But the last thing there is to be done is fixing the ending. When it was my workshop day a few of you mentioned that the ending cancelled out everything that Tech had done to stop his violent nature. But I do not know where to start to change the ending. If you have any suggestions, please by all means comment.
My story was the one from the guns point of view.
When I write, I have a very easy time creating characters that I like. Creating a plot that I like is harder for me. Whenever I write a short story the plot seems to change constanly. A Sacred Institution is an extremly different story than my first original draft.
With my difficulty writing plots, I always seem to end up with characters without stories/plots in mind. I currently have about a dozen characters like this. Does anybody else have problems with this? If so do they have any tips on how to create plots for orphan characters?
I have found this remarkable story by Anton Chekhov as I was attempting to find stories to help build my short story skills. I find the dialogue to be remarkable, thoughtful, and realistic. It is attached and can also be found here.
http://chekhov2.tripod.com/183.htm
Hey guys, I need your help with something! I’m trying to expose myself to books different than the ones I would pick up in a store. I know there are a lot of fantastic books out there and I want to read them! If you could take two seconds and reply to this post with your favorite book, or books, that would make for a great summer reading list. You can explain why it’s your favorite and what you like about it, but you don’t have to. Who knows, you might inspire some other people to read your favorite pick as well!
It’s a dog-eat-dog world, but who knew they were so damn hungry?
We Book.com is offering a grievous disservice to writers all across the globe. On this site, you can make a profile much like on facebook or other social sites, but the catch is that the interaction is based upon rating books. Not actual books, though. The first page of books. So your entire body if work is going to be based on the first few introductory paragraphs.
Why not just scan the covers and talk about how good or bad the stories are according to that?
In addition to intentionally choosing meaningful names, I sometimes like to put little secret messages in my writing. It’s not like anyone knows it’s there, it’s more like a personal fun 
Here’s an example:
The story I wrote for class is entitled Case M715. This is a reference to a passage in the Bible, Matthew 7:15. The passage reads: “Beware of false prophets, which come to you in sheep’s clothing, but inwardly they are ravenous wolves.”
I just really enjoying little things like that and really having fun with my writing.
I would just like to take a moment, once more, to thank you all for commenting on my short story. The period piece was slightly difficult to write. I am surprised that I did not receive more comments concerning the family, including the main character’s oldest brother and the mother and father. I suppose that all I would like to ask is, is more beneficial to provide more information about them, keep it the same, or tell less about them in the story?
Your comments would be greatly appreciated. I just realized that I mentioned them in passing, and now that I look it over again, it bothers me.
Thank you.
Alright, I didn’t do the greatest on my the first submission of my story The Prince and I would love some feedback on how to rework the beginning of it. Any suggestions? I would love to fix and finish my story before the end of the semester but I have no idea where to start!
First of all I would like to thank all of you for your helpful comments and for suffering through my dilapidated story with a rushed and distastefully devious ending. Here is my idea for Husher.
Even in the most remote of mining towns this destructive force awaits. No lives are spared and no holds are barred. Initially there are several environmental hazards in the mining town to all residents. The town is led to believe that their coal production has rendered them responsible for the atrocities committed unto the respiratory, endocrine, and nervous systems of every community member. Little do the puritanical yet rigid men who struggle for a livelihood know that terror awaits them. Every village shall be slashed and burned.
My inspiration for this song is the Megadeth song “How the Story Ends.”
Far off on the horizon you can barely see their torches
But rest assured they’re out there and they’re coming
If you listen, the sound is growing nearer of infantry
Marching out a hypnotizing rhythm
Destroying every town, light it up and burn it down
You may not like it now, but this is how the story ends
Above the ring of clashing steel, they raise flags of war
A sign to all the warriors who cannot hear
Amidst smoke of cannonballs, they bang the drums of death
Pound a cadence out for those who cannot see
Destroying every town, light it up and burn it down
You may not like it now, but this is how the story ends
Poison the wells and scorch the earth, everything’s slashed and burnt
You may not like it now, but this is how the story ends
Acoustic Solo – Dave
Solo – Chris
Destroying every town, light it up and burn it down
You may not like it now, but this is how the story ends
Poison the wells and scorch the earth, everything’s slashed and burnt
You may not like it now, but this is how the story ends
Little do they know that the town’s water supply has been deliberately poisoned causing maladies ranging from mental illness, and an upset stomach, to birth defects and mutations in the genome. The residents of Husher work extremely hard at the expense of their own health in order to make a living. They are told that all of their symptoms are due to complications from the coal, but the truth is that their water has been deliberately spiked in order to dull their mental capacities and make them servile. Who are the destroyers? They are simply a nationalistic group with perverted ideals using diffused responsibility as an excuse to destroy. They may be serving someone else’s goal or purpose but they are oblivious to this fact and only know the mob mentality that creates their acts of senseless violence and about the bonuses they receive for wreaking havoc. This group has pledged to be medieval revivalists that believe in total slaughter. The onset of this situation is gradual, but the decaying and servile state of the town prevents any perennial groups from forming and spreading the truth about the high level of heavy metals and antidepressants in the water supply. The town is hard working, and they have already endured an enormous amount of suffering, but they have no idea that the carnage and destruction has only begun. By the time the residents of Husher realize what is going on in their town it is too late. They are conservative, but some how they bought into total gun control ( they gave up their guns willingly) This cannot possibly be due to the poisonous and infectious agents that are being dumped quite regularly in the water supply. On top of this there is estrogen and other hormones in the water so if the poison doesn’t get them the hormones will. Husher was once a town where children swung on swings, biked to the park, and played football regularly. As the air quality declined and the soft kill of the town increased the residents became increasingly sedentary. This paved the way for the town of ‘compassionate conservatives’ implementing a gun ban that reflected the state of Nazi Germany. The persecution was only one breath away. This is the story of the Husher Holocaust. It is just one of a string of groups that decided to mass murder due to their extremely warped mental states and the condition of diffused responsibility for the killings of all of the parties that fell victim to these vicious and unforeseen attacks. There was nobody to offer warning. If there were there would have been no one to listen to them. Soft kill weapons in the water supply at this amount have caused extensive brain damage in all of the citizens of Husher.
I know this may sound political, but it is intended to be a story of the decimation of this town that has no evident political or moral message. It is an example of total destruction.
Recent Comments